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~きょ~


So young and so used,
Don't stop, the world is watching,
They can't look away.

I am a coward,
I've seen things you won't believe,
I wish you would stay.

Try to convince you,
I made peace with who I am,
Deny who I was.

We cover our scars,
We take hits when we are bored,
They make us look good.

Not afraid to die,
Where will we be tomorrow?
Bear a sincere smile.

I taste only sin,
The night is our memory,
No fear of regret.

Smell the stench of death,
Burning in the lust of youth,
Breathing is shallow.

I glamorized suicide,
Brought stories from down under,
And I'm a hero.





~きょ~ © J-Goth/Amanda P.
It was difficult, but with a little persistence, I managed to keep the correct form (pretty much).

Looking back at this, I felt sort of a shared emptiness, trying to be filled by whatever easy way out this world seems to always provide. I'm not sure whether the subject(s) is willing to take this way out, but he/she seems to know the truth about it.

~Please comment.

Hollow~ J-Goth/Amanda P.
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FoolSightBlind Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
Beautiful... if this was a painting, it would be what's left after the unimportant/irrelevant stuff is cropped out :)
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PyroTogepi Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm impressed - haiku is sometimes a difficult style to pull off because of its rigid structure, but you did it wonderfully. Great job. :D
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J-Goth Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you
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LuziferWhite Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
wonderul poem
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beautiful-creature Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, very relateable and interesting. I loved the flow and the words you used--they didn't make it overly complicated, and the impact of them was very... I don't know. Breathtaking, almost? Wonderful job!
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:iconj-goth:
J-Goth Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks, I appreciate that. :)
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sumarlegur Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ugh.
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Wickayukie Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
i like it <3
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blacksoul4321 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
:iconclapplz: Well done.
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